I'm a bit embarrassed by the piece I'm writing, actually; it's an Ulquiorra X Orihime fanfic (from Bleach). It's PG at the highest rating, in my opinion--I'm not into adult-type material, so if you're worried about that, it won't be a problem.
It's kind of long so far, about 110 pages on MS Word. It's not done, but I want to start posting parts of it online because I'm interested in feedback.
Mainly I'm looking for someone with a critical eye who can spot grammatical errors, continuity problems and plot holes, suggest ways that I can improve the syntax and language, and provide general insight about making the story more interesting/readable. However, I also absolutely would not mind a more casual reader who would tell me which parts seem boring, things I could consider taking out, etc.
I'm broke, so there would be no compensation, other than knowing you're helping a first-time fanfic writer!
If you are really interested, please PM me your e-mail address. Ideally, it would be nice if you were familiar with Bleach and the pairing, but if you are not, that's still OK because I would also like to see if my story can stand alone.